The author used interesting sentence structure and had a very entertaining way of expressing her passion for books.
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Naomi Bradford
8/28/2013 11:28:03 pm
http://thisibelieve.org/essay/50024/
Love the language, it's quite enthusiastic and really catches your attention.The essay was really informative and actually made me more interested in playing video games myself.
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Alek Mieczkowski
8/28/2013 11:28:34 pm
The author used alot of repetition to make the point he/she is trying to make stand out.
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Morgan Clawson
8/28/2013 11:28:53 pm
The author used a personal experience of hers to help explain what she believed in. It helped get her point across.
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Katie Rose Hand
8/28/2013 11:30:40 pm
Emotional anecdotes are used very well to help price the author's point.
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Katie Richardson
8/28/2013 11:30:42 pm
The author strongly stated her belief in the entrance statement.
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Sophia Winkler
8/28/2013 11:31:26 pm
Author gives a great timeline of events, to help the reader understand the story better.
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Rachelle Davenport
8/28/2013 11:31:35 pm
The author allows the reader to imagine being in his shoes.
I liked the way the author used facts to support his reasoning
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Simon
8/29/2013 01:23:11 am
I learned that facing your fears is a good thing, and the author strengthened this point with personal example as well as problems she faced when attempting to do this.
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Bobby cox
8/29/2013 01:23:36 am
The author was strong with his writing but he was not invasive or pushy.
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Nancy Munguia
8/29/2013 01:24:00 am
The author is very convincing with her writing in telling you how her condition can be changed with the right people.
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Thad Carey
8/29/2013 01:24:11 am
The author talks about interesting facts and an interesting subject
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Abby Rader
8/29/2013 01:24:38 am
I like how the author described their transformation in detail and connected the time from when they were different to how they are now.
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TJ Brown
8/29/2013 01:24:54 am
The first paragraph catches the readers attention and then she follows it with a personal experience.
I like the way the author worded things and really described things in a way that was easy to picture.
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Luis
8/29/2013 01:25:26 am
This essay was very heartwarming and the author did a good job with the flow of sentences
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Tejal Patwardhan
8/29/2013 01:25:36 am
The author used vivid imagery and appealed to our emotions in order to convey a powerful message about love, diversity, and acceptance.
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Chloe Hultman
8/29/2013 01:27:34 am
The author used personal experiences to convey their point
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Lexi
8/29/2013 02:12:53 am
The author was very clear about his message.
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Juliet Kelly
8/29/2013 02:13:07 am
The author gave me a story that many people could relate to, including myself.
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Cassie Richardson
8/29/2013 02:13:25 am
The essay had a moving story
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jake barnhart
8/29/2013 02:14:01 am
The author described the animal really well and it intrigued me
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Lauren Cannon
8/29/2013 02:14:43 am
The flow was smooth and the essay was very descriptive.
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Grace Bailey
8/29/2013 02:14:49 am
I like how in the essay it says that he was determined to be successful and that he did. He completed his goal in life to be successful even if its not what he imagined when he was younger. So it really spoke out to me.
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Dalton Xue
8/29/2013 02:14:56 am
The essay was very mysterious and interesting.
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Jocelyn Buckley
8/29/2013 02:15:07 am
The author wrote the essay traditionally, by listing what she would talk about and then writing a paragraph for each topic
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Myles miller
8/29/2013 02:15:24 am
Amazingly stunning use of vocabulary. Author was very clear, pretty interesting.
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Will Macmillan
8/29/2013 02:15:29 am
Very interesting and moving, I was really interested in what the author had to say.
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Teddy Winans
8/29/2013 02:15:37 am
I feel that the author was very strong in there feelings and what they thought. They have spicific evidence and they explained what they had to say
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Amy Carpenter
8/29/2013 02:16:02 am
The author uses hyperbole to show how strongly they feel about the topic.
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Reuben
8/29/2013 02:16:32 am
Great article in the way he conveyed his feelings
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Chase bolesky
8/29/2013 02:16:39 am
The aouthor used alot of worlds and stats that help you understand a world view and gave his opinion to help support the article
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Quique Guerra
8/29/2013 02:17:03 am
I liked how the author discussed imperfection, yet maintained a very positive tone throughout the entire piece.
The author made sure his message was understood and put lots of effort and thought into this.
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Sophie Struckmeyer
8/29/2013 04:06:28 am
The essay I read was more of a poem than an essay, and had beautiful usage of imagery and anecdotal evidence to make a clear and poignant point.
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Eliza shepherd &katie Heuser
8/29/2013 04:48:31 am
recognized her flaws, and wanted to learn from them
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Molly Jordan
8/29/2013 04:49:08 am
I noticed that both authors stated their beliefs outright at the beginning of the article. I liked knowing what the story would be about before I read further, and it was effective in drawing me in to read the article.
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Garrett Hattman
8/29/2013 04:49:35 am
This story exemplified the importance of giving compliments, by saying how easy they are to give but they can really lift a person up
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Tristan Allan
8/29/2013 04:49:54 am
In this essay the author used life events in the essay that allowed it to be easier to connect to instead of simply being words that appear together that form an essay.
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Daniel Wallace
8/29/2013 04:50:14 am
The author of this essay used descriptive imagery to truly pull the reader into his shoes; while still maintaining a fairly comedic tone.
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Chathan Driehuys
8/29/2013 04:50:37 am
The author conveyed his emotions through the use of words that invoke emotional response. He also had smooth transitions between the past and present.
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Ryley McG. Kate Z. Landon P.
8/29/2013 04:50:45 am
We thought that the piece was very touching, and impacted how we view other people who are more "outside the box". Some of these we do ourselves, everyone has their weird moments like when we are in the car and forget people can actually see us of just alone in our rooms.
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Mayah Burgess
8/29/2013 04:51:08 am
"I Learned Happiness" was a very poignant essay, describing how the author was able to find true happiness in her life. The author's use of quotes strengthened her overall point in the article that "love and hope are happiness."
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Olivia Meyer-Massey
8/29/2013 04:51:26 am
The author made some excellent points, and I think that the way she chose to organize her thoughts made it very easy to relate to as well as very inspiring. Not only could this article appeal to the minds of young people, but everyone because everybody has been in this situation at one point in their life. We have all been that teenager that nobody wants to hear from.
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Vanessa Enoch
8/29/2013 04:51:46 am
I appreciated how the author wrote the essay in a way that teenage readers can relate and really understand her point of view.
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Isabella Rincon
8/29/2013 04:51:54 am
The essay I read captured what the title said, it gave a personal point of view of different situations close to her that explained the idea that humans are pretty much the same regardless of their differences.
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Angelina Lu
8/29/2013 04:52:55 am
The author had a clear message and a good use of personal experiences, though they didn't use anecdotes.
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Nubia Murdaugh
8/29/2013 04:54:16 am
After reading I learned the true meaning of happiness which comes from love and family
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Molly Jordan
8/29/2013 04:54:21 am
I liked that the author alternated between telling her story and explaining the significance of it.
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Eliza shepherd & Katie Heuser
8/29/2013 04:54:46 am
They use good imagery and took the reader to that moment.
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Vanessa Enoch
8/29/2013 04:55:26 am
The use of imagery made this essay intresting to read!
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Kate Zakrajsek, Landon Perentis
8/29/2013 04:55:30 am
We thought that this was a really moving piece, as it gave us a new view on an old place.
Very technical. I found the quote very interesting at the beginning. I think quoted are very useful in writing and he used it well and he related it to other subjects.